Doing a check spot two hours into a show
httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=nJWwc3NeobU
1m22s Could’ve played up sexual tension between siblings as a response
3m02s Could’ve asked an audience member if they had siblings, to make a smoother transition into the next bit
4m57s Change “immigrant” to “foreigner” and smile on the line
Overall: Average weak check spot response.
A writer’s mic
httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=88yDMSOrBbg
0m50s Smile on the foreigners line
3m48s Say Shaq not Celtics, that’s not a ready association, or better yet, don’t say anything at all
5m26s Maybe slight reword to “cause I WANNA look pretty in a white dress”
Overall: Okay for a mic
A music and comedy mic
httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=fC1RQdIiY0E
3m28s Enunciate “love” more
4m44s There might be a better word than “sadness”
5m37s Add a few words, “then a year later, it turns into…”
6m35s Reword the tizzy to something that’s a closer parallel to a marriage argument
7m38s Great yet horrible improvised line, figure out a way to put it into the act
8m01s Say “too fast” not “too far”
8m18s Change the delivery on “I know, right” like it’s the most obvious thing in the world
9m05s Every night should be at the start of the sentence
Overall: Good set, first seven minutes of pretty new material went really well. Could’ve ended stronger.
Going last two plus hours into a show
httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=NI3TxpRf-o8
2m51s I could’ve gone off script more and made fun of him for feeling the need to yell out his school
Overall: Decent but not great. Steady-ish laughs throughout.
Going up 2.5 hours into the show
httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=JV0B-UvJiGY
1m18s First time that’s gotten an applause break
1m27s Good job milking the situation
3m14s Weird non segue
3m25s Weirder interruption
6m18s Weak ending. I should’ve done another mom joke since the other one hit so well.
Overall: First half was great, second half was so so.
