Tag: Critiques

The 8pm show with about 20 audience members

httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=bobkkyeK-MU

0m07s Playing off of the MC

4m17s Nice additional improvised lines

4m44s Thirty seconds of improvised lines that got laughs, wish I was always this loose

8m29s Weird compliment, but I’ll take it

9m23s Nice line

Part 2

httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=3_Eo3QIF5yE

0m47s Try “dragging” instead of “hauling”

1m50s Change the Igor Hunchback line

2m18s Not good for the bit if improvised line is by far the biggest laugh in the bit

3m08s Instead of “doing this” say “talking about this”

4m18s Nice when a newer joke does well

4m35s Cut the green card line

6m08s Nice additional line

6m22s Looks like I found a way to get into the “scary is…” bit without doing the psycho character

7m16s It got a good laugh but only half the room

7m43s That line doesn’t make sense there cause I got a decent laugh

Overall: Great eighteen minute set. The dad custody Kazaam and anit-marriage bits didn’t do as well as my more polished bits and need some rework, but the set flowed real nice and some other newer things worked.

A bar show for about ten people

httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=aA4NCRnvH3A

0m28s Terrible wind sound all set, ugh

3m02s Good job milking the sadness

5m11s Laundry line is a keeper, stuff before needs tightening

5m33s Make the act out more of a tantrum for the “we have to” part

Overall: Eh set, tighten the new material.

A music and comedy mic

httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=JHDN7N_tG7w

0m51s Better to pick a specific person than everyone

3m29s Hit the sentence smoother

4m42s It should be “who taught you to make deductions like THAT”

6m44s Think of different angles to hit this with because the premise is funny

7m26s Point to self on “someone”

7m50s Say “OMG” instead of “oh my god”

8m18s Don’t stutter the sentence

Overall: Weak set, the anti-marriage material needs tightening

Another mic

httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=Lm0aks0Wfno

1m43s Cut out “but” at the start of the sentence

3m05s Say “some” instead of “most”

6m55s Add “and it can’t come soon enough”

8m28s Cut the pile of cocaine line

Overall: Weak response, but good to say 9 minutes of reworked material out loud. I need to cut this stuff down to 4-5 minutes and then it might be funny.

An open mic

httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=5EpPqVlpp6c

2m21s If improvising in between lines, restate “you’d choose divorce because” before the act out

5m08s Maybe try a reword “wow, baby, who taught you to make deductions like that?”

5m56s More emphasis on that being the best example of a relationship

Overall: Good response for a mic and for working out new/revised material