Tag: Critiques

The 9:30 Show

httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=SJs8YX3ddH8

0m40s Decent improvised line, might be time to bring this joke back for another try

2m34s Figure out an act out for it

6m51s It should be “anti pretending you can predict how you’ll feel twenty years from now”

7m20s I can add “that’s the misogynistic part”

Overall for part 1: Decent set. The anti marriage material still needs work.

Going up a second time because the show ran out of comics

httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=p_EtWDmuO0o

0m48s The better joke is “hundreds, of seconds, of material”

4m39s Might be worth adding this as part of the standard joke

6m00s The “oh they do” helps the joke

6m56s Add a “I guess” before “somebody went to”

8m26s The end of that joke finally worked decently

9m51s Great delivery on “at least someone cares”

10m56s Change “get” to “got”

11m28s Setting up someone as the only fan may help the joke too

11m48s These two lines really help the joke

12m27s The only fan callback makes that stronger

Overall for part 2: Great set. The kazaam/alimony joke went really well.

Hosting an open mic (with a broken mic)

httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=swG1ilj47Sk

0m12s Say “in America” earlier

0m40s Sound happier and more excited while being this morbid

0m50s Figure out a wood chipper death

1m30s Cut this bit or make it part of something else, it doesn’t have enough legs on its own

1m58s Make the motion more circular

5m36s Don’t step on the laughs

6m08s Reword to “and NEVER being able to use your friend’s phone”

7m25s Say “gray wall matches the gray drapes… on the only window…”

8m09s Weak callback, rewrite

Overall: Average mediocre mic response, tried some new stuff and reworked some less new stuff

Hosting the midnight show (still with bad audio)

httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=dYD1oDezmSM

1m57s Nice improvised response

4m03s Try to understand it again, or repeat it with “I bet you use computers doing (mumble)”

6m36s Don’t pause after “you’re right, you’re right”

7m20s Asking “is your sister married” would be a better here

8m55s Could’ve done a save line to get a bigger laugh before bringing up the first comic

9m21s Don’t pause after “junkie”

10m12s Good job going out of material, sucks that I didn’t get to the big punch line on that joke though

Overall: Decent MCing but not great. Could’ve done more crowd work.

A 10pm show (camera is about 70 feet back and there’s music from a bar, so sound is less than ideal)

httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=OL8cn8inUas

6m05s Nice new line explaining Kazaam, should fix the joke

9m25s Two save lines in a row don’t make sense

9m32s I had a decent enough laugh that I didn’t need to do either of those save lines

Overall: Good set. Last twenty seconds could’ve been stronger though.

Hosting an open mic with no working microphone

httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=TIbN1kuE2yc

2m56s Hit the line without pausing

5m18s Get the line out without pausing

5m27s Good idea to end on a joke proposal

Overall: Ok for hosting a mic, work on saying some of the lines smoother