Tag: Critiques

Going up 2.5+ hours into the show with 10 out of 100 audience members left

httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=59LD7wZlUWg

0m25s Should’ve improvised for another twelve seconds so everyone who had already decided to leave could leave before going into my material

1m37s Don’t hold the mic stand for that long in a row

5m15s Say “ladies” instead of “girls”

6m29s If responding to the audience reaction say “either way” before going into the last line of “I guess I’m just a romantic”

Overall: Pretty bad even given the circumstances. My save lines barely worked.

Another mic

httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=H5FAmG0x8_k

1m13 Nice response to the joke

1m20s Find a stronger ending

4m39s Sell the “no, not a women’s prison” more

5m58s It should be sock puppets, not hand puppets

Overall: Okay for a mic, the first joke hit really hard.

The 8:30 show for ten or so audience members

httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=x7G2_9by3Es

0m34s Change the voice to be more kid like, and not mentally challenged

3m08s This isn’t the spot for her to say “Ben”

4m18s Also not a good spot for her to say “Ben”

4m36s Try doing the call back in a little kid’s voice

Overall: Ok set. The new bit at the end went well but I need to work on the voice/expressions for the little girl and figure out the call back.

Going last at an open mic

httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=XbPAv4oB8oE

1m43s Don’t say “gotta” twice in the same sentence

4m32s Give a better lick

4m52s Commit to the snip motion

Overall: Good for a mic. Wife like cell phone bit needs work.

An open mic

httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=r3RObOxm4JI

0m12s Weird comment to start, try not to start so negative even at a mic

1m02s Sound more excited about this

1m45s Say “emergency” more sarcastically

2m20s Do a better air lick

3m05s This should be objectifying women, not misogyny, it’s different

3m26s Nice new tag on the poetry save line

Overall: Weak response, even for a mic