Tag: Critiques

Going second at a music and comedy mic

httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=iGuVvx0yJ_s

1m16s Explain safe word quicker, I should have a funny safe word, maybe a washed up celebrity

3m00s Cut the dentist thing and get to her act out quicker

3m41s I need a stronger response before her next line

4m40s Say “she STILL had a decent figure”

5m32s instead of “he” say “the guy in the front”

6m49s Try to make it “why won’t you work a normal nine to five”

7m18s Impressive that I know I was on for exactly seven minutes at this point

8m10s Start yelling the safety word

9m10s Have her say my name during the “no”

10m06s More definite motion for “you’re welcome” commit to the physicality

10m40s Most people say head first, I could’ve asked why feet first

Overall: Weak set. I know better than to do only new stuff to start, but still choose to, and paid for it.

Hosting a mic

httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=9qXs31KTh3M

0m55s I should develop more material on what it means if someone doesn’t have a safe word yet

1m31s Cut the dentist line

1m48s That’s a good off the cuff line “you got sad real quick, your childhood must’ve been worse than mine” try to reuse that

2m16s Instead of “everything is open” name a shitty sounding restaurant as a defense

3m01s The conversation giving me cancer part should be first, then the tests

4m35s Don’t mention crying til the end of the joke

5m26s Needs a funnier second line

5m38s Good idea to work the safe word into the cake

Overall: Ok for a mic. I worked out new stuff, got some laughs, just need to tighten the material.

Hosting the writer’s mic

httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=3d0uDbecows

2m31s Order of the previous minute needs a better logical grouping

3m12s Might be worth keeping “linner”

3m23s Don’t explain why they haven’t seen each other

4m48s That’s a shorter safety word joke

5m18s Say “well” before “welcome to life”

Overall: Ok for a mic and working out new material, weak ending though

The 8pm show

httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=vyOFOWBlvAE

0m57s Good line

1m54s If they say yes do a “I got depression in my eye” act out

3m00s This line has been doing well lately

4m14s Good improv, try to incorporate it into future sets

5m17s Funnier if I set it up that we have one specific fan

6m19s That’s funny to incorporate

6m57s I need a dick joke that doesn’t take 45 seconds

8m51s Good statement

9m14s Don’t stumble

9m52s Could’ve done an improvised callback to “what’s up 550?”

Overall: Great set. I really interacted with the audience. I need to expand how I want to handle the “safe word” concept, but it has legs and allows for lots of improvised callbacks.

The 8pm show

httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=k0lTefNaDK4

1m26s Grab the mic a second sooner, or don’t touch it at all

2m10s If I had to do the save line in the middle of joke, I shouldn’t go back into it

2m25s Then I forced my way back into it again

4m52s I’m getting ok laughs, this line doesn’t make sense here

6m15s Cut “and that’s why I’m here”

Overall: Mediocre but not as horrible as I remember it going. I didn’t really have a strong set order and I jumped around jokes in a weird way, so I don’t blame them for not being with me.