Late night music and comedy mic
httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=4iVdT816vf0
1m53s That’s actually a funny place for him to use the safe word
2m32s Make this point first
3m56s Say “I only remember her chunky” at the start
4m30s Cut “linner” line
4m43s Word this better
Overall: Great set doing just new material. I remembered the order of my new stuff this time, and it went over well.
Going first on a show for ten audience members
httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=bgASFUSD3ho
0m22s Don’t call them dicks if they don’t laugh
0m30s Don’t go up on “air quotes”
1m02s Doesn’t make sense to do the eye thing if they don’t think it’s contagious
1m42s Should’ve done that line up front during the commenting on what already happened
2m16s Smile on that line
3m04s I should’ve done a choking “check box” act out
3m58s It should be “holes” not “hole”
5m30s Reverse the sentence, “maybe you wouldn’t be such a fat ass, if you let me pick the restaurant”
7m01s First time that line hasn’t worked
7m39s Say “but I’m gonna end on checkbox”
Overall: I got a laugh in the first ten seconds and pretty much bombed after that. There were maybe 2 or 3 other laughs, but this was the worse set I’ve had in a while.
Hosting an open mic
httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=ZrFPncDg88E
0m56s It should be “liter of wine straight out of the bottle” not bottle twice in the same sentence
2m37s Cut the everything is open line and point out why can’t I pick the place for my birthday
2m50s There should’ve been a line before this
3m11s This should’ve been earlier
3m30s Should’ve done this at the top of the joke
3m57s The order of the whole joke is messed up
4m29s Say “wouldn’t be” instead of “wouldn’t have”
5m29s Change the word order, make the wish first then blow out the candle
6m29s Doing time between comics
Overall: Response wise it was great, but I butchered the order of my new joke. The order on the birthday stuff is important so I can build up sympathy upfront and then get mean as a response, instead of just starting off mean.
A bar show
httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=SJrC4Qdh_Es
0m19s Good pause and stare
1m01s Work on a stronger “depression in the eye” act out
2m23s Good act out, figure out a way to recreate that
2m42s It should be “important enough” not “good enough”
4m17s The flexible line should be before the cancer line
5m18s Cut “linner” it only worked once
5m50s Good improvised line
6m29s Pause after “happy birthday” if it gets a laugh
6m54s Decent second dick joke
7m18s Good improvised save
8m12s Great improvised call back save
Overall: Very good set, I did 4 or 5 new minutes in the middle that went decently well.
The 9:30 show for like five people
httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=_5KzE0sDFJM
0m37s Address the “too big and black” comment
1m35s Don’t tell them “that’s all the jokes I’m gonna do” or “you may not laugh” just say “this is gonna be real shit”
1m57s It should be “designated audience member for sadness”
2m24s Cut the dentist line
3m15s Instead of “her response” say “it quickly devolves to”
5m08s Cut “right now”
5m20s At least save lines and acknowledging the situation works
5m51s Punch up her line, maybe “you must wait for special surprise”
6m36s Add word “normal” before “nine to five”
6m54s I can add “the saddest thing is, I only had one dick joke”
Overall: Weak set. Started on a few good laughs off of improvising, and ended on a laugh from a save line, and then barely got anything on the new material in the middle. New stuff has potential but needs rewrites and tightening.
