Tag: Critiques

The 9:30 show

httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=hUkI1JYJj-E

1m06s I had this idea twenty minutes before the show, and decided to try it out

2m32s If I decide to keep doing this bit, I should cut this down to three things instead of six

4m57s There might be potential in this bit

5m10s I should point out nobody would say “uptown” who actually lives in the city

6m52s Tighten this setup

7m35s Emphasis should be on “nuts” not “allergic”

Overall: Good, fun set. I tried a new concept that I thought of that day that may have potential. And the birthday bit is progressing nicely.

Doing a check spot on the 10pm show

httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=cBlJSh0lQ9s

1m08s I had them clap since nobody was paying attention

3m08s I might as well just talk more to that guy since he was paying attention

5m54s Yell “cannonball” as I do the motion, not yell first then motion

Overall: Pretty terrible even for a check spot. After I saw that a few minutes of jokes weren’t hitting I should’ve tried going harder to crowd work.

The 8pm show

httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=g4sQlhzyT1k

0m17s Do “hey” for a second longer

5m08s Checks starting to get dropped

7m44s Good line to set it up

7m54s Good delivery on the hair cut line

9m19s Best the birthday bit has gone to date

10m28s Look up more on the hair line

Overall: Great set. Checks got dropped halfway through but I still got strong laughs and the new birthday material is really coming together.

The 10pm show

httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=u0wy9Gu1JMg

0m15s Take another half second on “hey”

5m09s I should comment how the safe word will be a temporary reprieve, it’s not gonna stop the sadness

Overall: Eh. Not terrible but not great.

The 8pm show

httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=fY4UmSK5RSM

0m15s Do the “hey” nicer and for a little longer

4m40s Good improvising off their response

5m50s Nice to see that the “punch lines are for amateurs” line works on a real crowd too

7m33s I need to make three very distinct physicalizations for the three characters

Overall: Good but not great. I need more practice with the birthday stuff and to trim the words a little.