Going up 2.5+ hours into a show for ten remaining people
httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=mTKWhmVjV70
0m47s Say “to fix those numbers”
1m47s Nice that cannonball is working
2m08s Say “my family” instead of “myself”
3m56s It’s good to check in on the sadness, keep doing that
6m00s Stretch out the “umm”
6m57s Looks like “please drink and drive” hits stronger than “don’t drink and drive”
Overall: Ok for this long into the show.
An open mic
httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=J3DwZvhyKOE
1m17s Rip into him a little more for that
2m21s Figure out a way to change tone even if I’m reading something
4m03s Go more extreme on the poses
4m29s Rephrase to “can’t get enough of Bambi’s mother dying”
5m20s Commit stronger to the face touching
Overall: The new dating bit needs to be significantly cut down. It’s almost five minutes long now, it might be funny when it’s under two minutes.
Hosting the writer’s mic
httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=Cxf4rPJ3w1g
2m57s Don’t improvise the “in touch with my feelings” line before the self aware line
3m44s Cut the elimination parts
5m14s Rewrite #6
Overall: Weak even for hosting a mic. The online profile has potential but needs to be way shorter and a lot punchier
The 10pm show
httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=UUWXPlYrpVg
4m47s Make it prison camp not work camp
5m00s That call back is getting better but still not fully there
6m32s Could improvise a little better here but I had to finish up
Overall: Solid set, but some of the suicide bit didn’t get as strong of a laugh as I would’ve liked
MCing the 8pm show for 20 people
httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=Tl3myuSI43U
2m39s Nice improvised line
2m49s Good guesses tonight
3m04s Point out that the other guy blows up his girls spot, see if they’ve met
4m49s Don’t stutter/repeat here
5m51s Good job getting out of that weird interaction
8m51s That’s a funny line
9m09s She had a nice callback to my previous joke that I didn’t pick up on fully
10m21s Change the delivery on the applied for it last week line
11m52s Add a “he’s like, now you’re entertaining me”
12m10s Doing time between comics
13m20s Stepped on a laugh, so the line didn’t hit right
Overall: Good job MCing. I weaved in and out of crowd work and material and had good energy.
