Tag: Critiques

Going up at like 2am at a music and comedy mic

httpv://youtu.be/jIof44LcI28

2m55s Cut the disqualified for not being born here line and the Obama line

5m20s The addition of the gas and friend isn’t needed here

8m10s Should’ve done the eye line at the start of this bit

8m20s Cut the DMV line

8m48s The sentence should be flipped, half a face goes at the end of it

10m37s Say “kitchen” without “sink”

10m44s Last line should’ve been “I don’t know where the fourth head went either”

Overall: Ok for two in the morning.

A bar show in NJ

httpv://youtu.be/QUF5pH53P-I

2m08s Repeat “power drills and wood chippers” before the home depot tag

4m00s It should be “or we’ll shoot you” not “kill you”

11m52s Don’t stumble on the line

Overall: Solid set except for where the Kazaam joke fell flat.

A 9:30 show

httpv://youtu.be/avaXha-c1Fs

1m45s The insurance riff might be worth trying as an actual bit

5m58s Don’t clasp hands together on “roomfuls of strangers”

6m29s Cut the DMV line, doesn’t make sense

7m59s Hit “this is over” harder

Overall: Good set, spent two minutes riffing at the start and said a bit at the end for the first time that has potential.

Going up last 2+ hours into a show

httpv://youtu.be/QQ90CLY95iQ

0m49s Swallow the drink and look up and down more

2m45s Great length of laugh for this long into a show

4m15s Take out the word “online” if not plugging the website

Overall: Good for a four minute set.

Going up 3 hours into a show for ten remaining audience members

httpv://youtu.be/LUc-Z_c4sbg

0m23s Put emphasis on “not” AND “friends”

0m54s Tilt my hand more like a drink

2m47s Say “oww” when he gets hit

4m11s Don’t go out of the character so much as start to slowly go back to normal

5m20s Nice to see the petition line working

Overall: Ok considering how long the audience had been there.