Tag: Critiques

Closing out the 8pm show

httpv://youtu.be/P-So322DE0k

0m32s Change “we are not” back to “we’re not”

1m26s Handled that curveball decently well

1m43s Restate “I can tell you’ve disappointed your parents” if I go off the cuff before saying “disappointdar”

4m38s My eyes should be looking up almost towards the ceiling

4m48s Don’t over shake the mic

5m18s Good call out

5m28s Could’ve gone into a cell phone bit because I was reminded about it

7m14s Decent place to put that

10m31s Stay in the psychotic character for an extra second after the secret

Overall: Good set but not great.

Doing a quick check spot on the 10pm

httpv://youtu.be/179kErM6Uvc

3m32s Nice call back to an improvised bit

4m14s Don’t mess up the question

Overall: Standard check spot response

The 8pm show

httpv://youtu.be/rhmlbSTBLf8

1m02s A couple of college kids had seen perform me a bunch of times before

1m41s Try pausing for half a second before “disappointdar”

2m35s Didn’t need to address it a second time yet, at least on the video it doesn’t seem like them chiming in interrupted my flow as much as it felt at the time

5m00s The eyes don’t need to scan as quickly

6m10s It was an all Asian table

7m28s Hit “child abandonment” harder

8m10s I skipped a line about “you should make more compromises”

8m48s If someone doesn’t contribute a safe word, ask someone else. If two don’t, share mine then designate someone. The order was wrong here.

10m34s Cut the unconditional love line

12m26s Add “I’m like” before saying something

13m47s Nice little crowd interaction

13m53s Stretch out the girl’s voice on the syllables more

Part 2

httpv://youtu.be/5xxYR9ErAbw

1m12s Nice improvised callback

1m27s I could’ve added “especially those ten back there”

4m41s More emphasis on “animal”

5m44s I forgot “of sadness” and then to do “our cycles are in sync”

6m20s It’s not clear she’s holding a martini glass, play with my hair instead

Overall: Considering how much people saying my punch lines at the start threw me off mentally, I did well. I got laughs throughout this longer set and ended strong.

An open mic with an actual audience

httpv://youtu.be/pGMV3UQr0E0

0m53s If I say something after the setup that isn’t the punch line, repeat the setup real quick

2m35s Don’t say “life’s tough” before “welcome to life”

2m51s My hand should be out by my chest for that voice

3m17s More emphasis on “deserve”

3m49s Instead of “and it has a” say “with a”

4m42s The save lines hit harder than any other lines during the bit

Overall: Decent set, the occupy wall street material is getting good laughs, but the biggest laughs are the save lines where I acknowledge I’m ranting and losing everyone. Work on getting the actual lines funny without the saves.

Hosting the late night portion of the show (2+ hours in)

httpv://youtu.be/dtyeTDCDn2c

1m08s Do crowd work or a save line when the first joke gets such a low response

1m59s Speed up the gun raising motion

3m18s Do the nose sniffing motion faster after the previous line

5m18s Make more “ouch” sounds

Overall: Pretty lousy. I held off on save lines for way too long and I seemed generally miserable. I need to learn to pretend I’m having fun, even when I’m not. Or better, do something that will make it fun for me.