Tag: Critiques

The 8pm show

httpv://youtu.be/zoahUHZWILY

0m32s Instead of “what we’re doing” go with “what we’re working with”

4m02s Don’t stumble on the words

4m25s Don’t move my eyes so quickly

5m17s Don’t move my eyes so quickly on the side to side

6m10s It didn’t seem random enough, maybe say “hi” to her first

6m54s I forgot the end to this joke

7m02s Don’t switch hands on the circle

7m18s This bit goes better if I remember to put the mic in the stand for it

9m48s The mouth line needs rework

9m58s So does the new affectionate line

10m06s Good improvised call back

Overall: Good at the start and end but the anti marriage stuff didn’t hit as well as usual.

The 8pm show

httpv://youtu.be/UiJKw2nCT1E

2m45s I confused the order but it still worked. Should be “Bill and a six pack”

4m01s I forgot the last part of the cell phone like marriage bit

4m22s Rework the “what’s next” part

5m02s No need to make it “sister’s” infant, just an infant

6m26s Try a slight pause after “so”

7m18s I hate that this is the line that gets an applause break

7m54s Funny cause this happened a week or two ago, and I made a good guess about it

8m58s Don’t change hands where I keep the mic for the two characters

10m07s Pause for an extra half second before “I’m allergic to nuts”

Overall: Good set of doing mostly newer material without setting it up with the older material.

Going up around 3am at a music and comedy mic

httpv://youtu.be/3FQvqb84ihY

0m55s People were talking so when it’s this late, I just wait til they stop

1m20s If I get that kind of weak/little response I can say “that’s how I felt about it too”

2m55s Change “pretty one” to “blonde one”

6m58s It should be “he tells me” instead of “he goes”

8m43s Hit “12^th century” harder

Overall: Decent for the time of night. The new bit at the end wasn’t as strong as the slightly older stuff.

Going in the middle of the 9pm show

httpv://youtu.be/Pl2OayZLNdI

2m07s It should be “he tells me” instead of “he goes”

2m17s It should be “movie watching” and no stutter

3m21s Might wanna cut the bottom rung line, or put it after the protesting part

5m27s Drop both hands to the side

Overall: Solid but unspectacular set, slightly better considering I did a bunch of newer material.

A 7:30 show

httpv://youtu.be/qNtv6ElEVbY

0m37s This used to hit a lot harder, rewatch old videos and see what I’ve changed

0m50s Slow it down a little and visualize the shoes

5m30s Add “and keep it positive” in the setup

6m06s It’s better to do this right after a mom impression

Overall: Solid set with an applause break in the middle but some of the punch lines could’ve hit harder.