A 7pm show
httpv://youtu.be/P328s_huh4M
1m07s Pause after “Russian” and again after “immigrant”
1m38s Try doing “no, never, go do your homework” in Russian accent
3m03s She should stop smiling on the “son have doctorate” line
3m31s Commit to the kissy face for 3 seconds
3m42s Hit “sixth” harder
4m10s Smile on the whole threesome line
4m40s Reverse brunch and shoe shopping
4m50s Do a heavier eye roll
Overall: Good set but the first half was stronger than the second half.
Hosting the writer’s mic
httpv://youtu.be/UntJbYEiPDM
1m06s Don’t move the hands as much so it’s easier to see the two->three->two fingers
2m15s Cut the pet bear line
3m25s Milk the kissy face gesture for longer
3m37s Don’t say “right up front” twice in the same sentence
4m00s Hit future harder
Overall: Decent for an open mic
The 10pm show
httpv://youtu.be/h0SFbotdRa8
1m55s Change the hit man and car lines, as those laughs are significantly lower than the previous ones
2m49s I don’t need the professor part in here
5m25s Say “our” instead of “the”
5m47s Hit “future” harder
7m00s Smile right from the start of the song
7m22s Don’t tap the mic
7m46s Save line not needed here as I got a decent laugh on the previous line
Overall: Good solid set. The last thirty seconds could’ve been stronger though.
The 8pm show
httpv://youtu.be/eG_svgN9qQU
1m28s Tighten the sentence
2m59s I can tighten the exaggeration sentence
5m46s Emphasize “phone” to make it clear I’m no longer referring to a phone
Overall: Decent set with consistent laughs but no huge laughs.
A 4pm show
httpv://youtu.be/6sb0qij8hcA
1m09s Find a way to shorten this sentence
2m31s Cut “the bear”
3m44s Don’t stumble over words
6m12s Have her smile on the first line
6m18s Hit “no future” harder
Overall: Solid set with consistent laughs, but started rushing it at the end.
