The 8pm show
httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=r9Kf4MNdO1A
3m39s Might wanna do the hand grab motion twice
4m40s The laughs were good enough that I didn’t need to acknowledge it, although it got a decent laughs
6m12s Go stronger on the eye roll
Overall: Very good set, (although at the time I felt it hadn’t gone that well because some of the laughs weren’t as strong as others).
Going up very late at a music comedy mic
httpv://youtu.be/rBfGcxhEop0
0m32s If one person laughs louder than most, I can comment on “maybe they’ve actually been a prostitute”
2m08s Cut the three career options bit
2m32s Stop after “no”
4m19s Gotta acknowledge if someone says vicious cycle before I get to it
Overall: Okay considering it was almost 4am
A 9pm show for 10 or so audience members
httpv://youtu.be/4zOlINfDmNA
1m07s Cut this part
1m30s Pause after “no”
2m59s Pause for an extra half second after “women”
3m18s Better but I can milk the kissy face for even longer
4m48s Do air quotes on “emergency”
6m37s Make this two sentences instead of one run on thought
7m43s More emphasis on “allergic”
9m07s Horrible forced crowd work, figure out a better interaction to set it up
9m58s Hit “bring it” harder
Overall: Okay for a small crowd but plenty of room for improvement
A 10pm show for 12-15 people
httpv://youtu.be/rzq6DYd1YGc
0m12s Use “told” instead of “mentioned”
0m37s Seem a little happier on the lines
1m14s Find a better delivery for this line
3m22s Do the kissy face for longer than is comfortable
3m45s This is the way to always delivery the truck stop / Denny’s line
4m25s Say “brunch” before “shoe shopping”
6m11s Step forward more on the punch line
Overall: Good for a small crowd with consistent laughs.
Going up 2 hours into the 8pm show
httpv://youtu.be/Dz_F4moKqPA
0m17s Great improvised line for when I go up late in a show, make sure to reuse this
0m34s Get the setup clearer
1m22s No need to comment on the intelligence
1m41s Make the 2 to 3 to 2 finger motion clearer and without hand movement
2m03s Try “no, never, go do your homework” without pausing
3m57s Consider saying cycle before the hand grab motion
4m03s Commit to the kissy face for three seconds instead of one second
5m09s Consider cutting the Notebook line, laughs aren’t that strong
5m47s Change delivery when giving the scenario
6m10s Cut the range and bars lines
7m10s Smile and look at the crowd while waiting for the MC to return
Overall: Solid set with consistent laughs, could still use adjustments
