Tag: Critiques

The 8pm show

httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=HIyiON-hyWs

3m34s The eyes should be darting even harder and faster

4m20s Good job reacting to a weird reaction

5m15s Enunciate the “s” at the end of contracts

5m38s Pointing across the body is stronger body language

6m03s Cut everything after the championship

6m52s Fun improvising stuff

8m21s Great audience response

10m16s Prison clown isn’t working

11m16s More emphasis on “I never realized”

Overall: Solid but not spectacular set, but I had fun and did a lot of crowd work in the middle.

Closing the 8pm show

httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=PeoMbJAPlUM

0m35s Address the talking at this point since it occurred twice, otherwise it seems like I’m too robotic

3m38s Milk the kissy face for longer

4m18s Sound happier about the amazing stats right up front

4m42s Cut everything after the threesome championship

5m55s Do the eye roll stronger

6m42s She was talking louder than it sounds

7m13s Good improvised response

8m18s Not sure why the joke fell apart

10m10s Say “I’m kidding” way more playfully

10m44s Gotta have a third save line in the old barrel

Overall: The first 8 minutes were strong, then I dipped for 3.5 minutes but brought it back for a decent close.

Going up at like 1am at a music and comedy mic

httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=FyAA6fykmRY

4m38s Finish the joke, or cut the line

5m21s If I can figure out a way to make the last 20 seconds funny, it’ll be really good and unique

6m43s He said “he treats the light like a 3 year old boy” and it took me way too long to get it

8m20s That’s a funny improvised line, might wanna keep it for other shows

10m27s Don’t bumble the line

10m44s More commitment on “that’s the American way!”

11m12s Weird buzzer motion, smooth that out

Overall: Decent for 1am and I might’ve improvised a line or two that are keepers.

Going towards the end of an 8pm show

httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=I2wS4aXH8Ek

1m05s He probably said “I’m not a republican”, I should just assume if someone responds, that’s they’re response

5m08s Say “oh” instead of “yeah”, makes it more conversational

6m35s Weird forced place for this line, consider closing on it instead

Overall: Solid set with consistent laughs although there was a slightly awkward interaction towards the start.

Going towards the end of a 7pm show

0m14s Go off on the riff more or don’t acknowledge it

5m01s The lines after the threesome championship aren’t as strong as the rest of the act

Overall: Really strong set, but I need to figure out why the second half of the contract joke isn’t hitting as hard as everything else