Doing a short spot on the 10pm show
httpv://youtu.be/vw6sOq7PUtU
Overall: Nice tight 3.5 minute set.
Performance Critique: March 23a
The 8pm show
httpv://youtu.be/c7qDxw3zJsg
1m18s Cut the pander and south lines (aka there’s a reason I hadn’t done them in a while)
4m55s Wait for the laughs to die down before that line, even if I wasn’t expecting laughs there
5m52s Emphasize “lifetime”
7m11s Eyes should be darting around more
8m47s Clear sentence, don’t mumble
Overall: Solid set with consistent laughs.
Performance Critique: March 21
A 9PM Show
httpv://youtu.be/LWO_ssoybzg
0m08s Weird start
1m05s No need for a save line here
1m06s Find the lighting better
1m24s Better to say “you’ll be able to relate to this”
4m03s The hands shaking is good
Overall: Mediorce set at best. I got laughs but no room laughs.
Performance Critique: March 20
The 8pm show
httpv://youtu.be/9X1HfsF9ZT0
0m23s Try giving a “what the hell” look
1m10s Palm in a weird position, make it seem less robotic
3m43s Say “you’re” at the start of the sentence to be clearer
3m54s Say “it’d be like”
4m17s Emphasize “lifetime” harder
4m22s No need for the “yeah” here
4m38s Might be able to cut the horny line, it’s not working that well
5m44s Good crowd work
5m52s Sell the eye roll even harder
6m03s Smile a little more on this
6m52s Not the right place for this one liner
7m06s The “I’m tough enough” was improvised but might be a decent idea
7m24s Move eyes around more
8m04s Sell the “oh that’s so cool” better
9m12s Shouldn’t have done this bit here, always close with it
10m04s Try having the eyes open a little more
10m52s Should’ve done it with the accent
Overall: I got consistent laughs but it wasn’t as strong or as smooth as it should be.
Performance Critique: March 17b
Opening the 10pm show
httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=Z8zyBbylqOI
2m41s The “thanks” steps on the laugh
3m31s Could’ve milked it for even longer
3m59s Sound happier on “baby”
5m10s There’s some sort of AT&T joke here after “no service”
5m30s Could’ve asked why they were being shady about it
6m57s Smile more during this song
Overall: Good for first, couple of places I can edit down
