Tag: Critiques

A 6pm show with about 10 audience members

httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=3z8pBnqS8M8

0m48s I need to have my head facing straight ahead when doing the mouth drop

2m08s My good improvised lines always get bigger laughs than my best jokes, I need to deliver my best jokes how I deliver my improvised lines

5m32s Someone else made fun of him before

7m08s Hold out the dollar bills higher in the air

Overall: Not great, not atrocious. I need to force myself and trust myself to improvise more often in my sets, as that gets the biggest laughs

A Friday Night Show

httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=Ie376QaSFUg

1m45s I might wanna try the line without the pause

5m05s Get rid of “anal” and don’t say “wine” before “spit or swallow”

5m43s Fully turning my head and going right into it makes this line funnier

7m18s Say “Jewel” instead of “she”

7m53s Need a stronger punch than “straight jacket”

Overall: Great set with steady laughs throughout, but the Jewel joke could be made funnier

A Friday afternoon mic

httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=1a-TPia9VEk

0m36s Say “subtle” not “casual”

1m50s Pause for half a second after “ohhh the multimillionaire club”

3m07s Get rid of the mascara line

3m41s Think of something else instead of Mercedes

6m31s Out of five or seven times I’ve told this joke, this is the only time it worked. Too bad non-comedian audiences don’t usually request jokes…

Overall: Another practice rep at an open mic

Late night music and comedy

httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=FEO3FBKfZog

2m07s The third one needs to be more of a twist

Part 2

httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=aX3H3FBQvMA

0m46s Combine this to one sentence “can I upgrade to contract in two years from…”

2m31s I’m not hitting the last word of each punch line hard enough

Overall: I started out strong when making fun of people in the room, but the material was up and down

An open mic with five comics

httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=OuCcgpV7Vu0

1m18s I wanted to try the “I just don’t care” tag, not happy with it

3m03s I like how I spent a longer amount of time work shopping a joke than doing it

3m32s Instead of “I did this the other night” say “I said this the other night”

4m32s This is usually how I talk about a joke off stage…

5m41s This joke doesn’t seem like a keeper

Overall: I made the best of a low energy mic and work shopped a joke while on stage