Going up 2 hours into the 10pm show
httpv://youtu.be/-AnhnODkkvc
6m46s Make it clearer that it’s my dad talking
9m34s Hand motion and pointing needs to be better defined
10m52s Try “five minutes of Russian optimism” before “where everyone’s dead”
12m07s Emphasis on “I”
Overall: First half was good then it dropped off and I never got them fully back.
MCing the 8pm show
httpv://youtu.be/jEwni_RE-co
1m58s Slight pause after “oh it’s okay”
5m58s Great interactive crowd work
15m20s Tighten this bit but at least there’s laughs now
Overall: Great job with the 11 minutes up front. I did a ton of crowd work and only did 3 or 4 jokes. The in between time was a little hit or miss.
Going up 2.5+ hours into a show
httpv://youtu.be/E78UbfJbWq4
1m47s Deliver “Do your homework” as a punch line
3m52s Cut “it’s a very nice place”
Overall: Weak. The new divorce bit still needs a lot of work.
The 10pm show
httpv://youtu.be/QRFnL4ckx4c
1m21s Good call back to a previously improvised line
4m04s Emphasize “although”
4m48s Make the setup clearer otherwise the punch lines don’t make much sense
7m47s Tucking the chin in is a good way to show sarcasm without people seeing my eye roll
8m47s More emphasis on “I”
Overall: Solid set, the divorce bit in the middle was weaker but I brought it back and did a good job improvising throughout.
The 8pm show
httpv://youtu.be/FIn8Yl1WD3E
2m27s Emphasize “hate” more
3m16s Emphasize “although” more
3m31s Good job reacting to the situation of someone pressing the light switch
4m40s Good call back to earlier crowd work
7m25s Don’t close with this joke, it’s too hit or miss
Overall: Ok set. Good job improvising when the lights got turned off.
