Late night music mic
httpv://youtu.be/GJjfxluYFfg
4m08s Rewrite the previous minute
5m16s To streamline it, if someone else yells out a safe word, they can become the new sadness member of the audience
6m27s Need a better punch line
7m00s Try saying the dead lines while smiling
Overall: Mediocre. Worked out a bunch of rewrites, that still need rewrites.
A bar show for 8 or 10 people
httpv://youtu.be/zfG75AebyqA
0m32s Could’ve gone with “so only one of you lays pipe in Thailand”
2m54s Say “some of you” instead of “a few of you”
3m18s If going from “Russian prison camp” to Blade, I can repeat the word “prison”
3m42s Move the eyes around more
4m48s Weird angle of leaning towards him
Overall: Weak set. I tried crowd work up front but should’ve gone back into it later on.
A 9pm show
httpv://youtu.be/Mu6qNjvlyr8
1m41s The “do your homework” in an accent isn’t funnier than without the accent
3m18s The pause between “cycle” and “of sadness” doesn’t work
3m53s Needs a better ending than “like your name”
5m51s Cut the marriages have been around for thousands of years part
Overall: Mediocre set. Could’ve tried doing real crowd work but I was working out bits.
Going up 2.5+ hours into a show for the few remaining people
httpv://youtu.be/B-P_73aLCBM
3m18s “Night after night” isn’t strong enough to be it’s own punch line
3m41s Cut “and he spoke English”
4m10s I can go straight to “moved fifty miles away” without the previous sentence.
Overall: Terrible even for the six or eight people there.
Doing checks during the 8pm show
httpv://youtu.be/rs2D_ibzZrQ
3m15s Try pausing between “vicious cycle” and “of sadness”
5m06s Funny impression of the audience
6m11s Nice little improvised comment
6m25s Try “except for you guys” instead of “not you guys”
7m58s Hit the punch line looking up or straight ahead, not down
Overall: Solid set, especially for checks
