Performance Critique: September 5b

A Sunday night bar show

httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=kYrIYPVZwAA

0m40s I seem pissed off, don’t

2m42s Stop after each of those lines, I’m going too fast

4m38s My third favorite response after laughter and applause is someone choking on their drink/food

6m10s Completely unnecessary sidebar, but it’s funny to me

6m49s Make the diagram much bigger and do each part with a different hand

7m18s Add a couple of more thoughts after “Do we want him to follow us home?” like “That could be fun” and “We’ve always wanted a New York adventure”

7m58s Say “Mom before daughter”, not “Mom and daughter”

Part 2

httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=tQDKnRy9z_k

1m32s I need to figure out how to get people on board with that joke

Overall: Ehh. I got laughs but they weren’t that loud. The mobile adoption center joke still doesn’t work, so I shouldn’t end on it.

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