The 9:30 show for like five people
httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=_5KzE0sDFJM
0m37s Address the “too big and black” comment
1m35s Don’t tell them “that’s all the jokes I’m gonna do” or “you may not laugh” just say “this is gonna be real shit”
1m57s It should be “designated audience member for sadness”
2m24s Cut the dentist line
3m15s Instead of “her response” say “it quickly devolves to”
5m08s Cut “right now”
5m20s At least save lines and acknowledging the situation works
5m51s Punch up her line, maybe “you must wait for special surprise”
6m36s Add word “normal” before “nine to five”
6m54s I can add “the saddest thing is, I only had one dick joke”
Overall: Weak set. Started on a few good laughs off of improvising, and ended on a laugh from a save line, and then barely got anything on the new material in the middle. New stuff has potential but needs rewrites and tightening.
