Performance Critique: September 23b

Doing a 45 minute feature set for mostly musicians

httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=bROutMkKkcw

1m45s I didn’t need to address the crossed arms there, cause I had just gotten a good laugh

3m44s Good job addressing the situation, I could’ve gotten a couple extra laughs on “If you guys could just keeping smiling and not laughing the whole time, it would mean the world to me” or something

4m26s Instead of “What? You guys have morality” make it a statement as “I learned you have a morality”

4m42s Milk the poses for longer

6m37s Pause for longer between the first and second position

8m36s Don’t do this joke so early on, as it’s one of my weaker jokes and I need to build more momentum first

Part 2

httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=niuvSjKQoXw

0m52s Don’t say “here we go” twice, find different words before “sand”

1m12s Get more laughs before this

1m30s Deliver this with more confidence

2m39s Do one more round of “pow pow”

2m56s Pause for laughs

5m15s Kill the draft room line

5m47s I don’t need “to drive”

7m57s It should be “impress her friends with” instead of “brag to her friends about”

8m13s I should address the person doing the “whooos” instead of laughing

9m01s It should be “great COMEDY class”

Part 3

httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=WaOMdkSasjE

0m25s I should’ve added, “Maybe I’ll try out those moves at the Greenwich festival”

0m42s Overly aggressive to the guy for no reason, I should get a laugh off of him instead of just getting mad

1m22s Only say “nobody believes me” until it gets a laugh, I should’ve done it once in this set

5m05s Sell the fist pump more, and address the “whooo”

5m19s Someone just walked in the room and I’m addressing it

6m26s More emphasis on “WHOLE”

6m55s Pause longer after “got your nose”

7m11s Ask more about how you meet at Yoga school

7m37s It should be “felt familiar” not “looked familiar”

8m55s Make a more natural dropping motion

Part 4

httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=GzMr_4nVeNU

0m10s Pause longer for it to actually get uncomfortable if I’m gonna acknowledge that

1m29s Good job mentioning the slogan again after it went off track a little

6m48s Don’t point to myself when saying “for her”

7m23s I should say “YOU’RE my netflix plan” instead of “it’s”

Part 5

httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=HJfOgGePvFA

2m59s Say “inefficient” more clearly

9m10s Sell the heart attack better

Part 6

httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=9GlEoAUW_L0

Overall: I did 49 minutes without notes, which is good. But I was overly concerned about remembering all my jokes that I didn’t do much crowd work and the places where I interacted with the crowd I seemed annoyed. If you want to hear 97% of my jokes, this is the post to watch.

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