9:30pm show
1m19s Try changing “messed up” to “messed up-ish”
3m59s Don’t step on the laugh
4m10s Might want to pick up the imaginary hula hoop between the two hula hoop motions
4m52s Change the last line
5m15s Tighten the words and get the act out better, but the idea is there
6m30s Don’t move my hand on this act out, her arm should always be out straight
7m38s Don’t pause after “your phone”
8m12s Make the setup tighter
8m19s And this slightly clearer and less words
9m04s Needs a couple of less words
Overall: Good set but the new lines need polishing.
