Hosting my Astoria show
httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=76DQvSeICtk
0m55s Get the wording tighter
1m21s Try “that’s the Detroit of the south”
1m52s Try “ayyyyyy box” instead
2m39s That hand motion is funny
3m51s It’s a guy with that name
4m19s Tighten the setup into one coherent sentence
4m48s Say “belt loop” instead of “belt”
Part 2
httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=WiuoqorPAQQ
1m39s This needs a stronger ending where the kid wins
6m07s This feels forced change the structure
7m58s Cut the synagogue question
8m15s Cut this whole “imagine if America did this” part, it’s too forced
Overall: My crowd work was respectable but I should try to maintain my high energy throughout. And my newer jokes need work.
