Hosting the Sunday writer’s mic
httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=5UyTdLUO1YU
0m34s Shorten to “I’m not being racist, I assumed that…”
2m20s It should be “apple pie” not “american pie”
2m32s I forgot to ask about “what holiday’s do you celebrate?”
3m09s Change this whole premise to “my friend is a good person, but he always complains. He’s not gonna be any better in heaven.”
3m31s Explain “cause oysters make pearls”
3m44s I need to make this a more distinct character
3m52s It should be a “sold out” concert
4m42s Pause before “to be” not after
5m16s Rephrase to “let’s reach towards the sun gods”
6m04s Do this in a girl voice
6m27s Change it from “knife” to “switchblade”
Overall: Surprisingly all of these jokes have potential. (Usually my newer or rewritten material is like a 20% hit rate.) But these jokes still need tightening and better delivery.
