Going first on the 8pm show
httpv://youtu.be/jSdr_8U23Go
1m21s Don’t keep the improvised “brings everyone together” line but it made me laugh in the moment
2m15s Deliver “mom” more annoyed and with a pause after
2m50s Good job incorporating the phone going off
3m22s Pause at the top of the circle
4m50s Emphasize “lifetime”
5m56s Figure this out before starting the set so I don’t waste 30 seconds on repetitive crowd work and ruin flow
7m27s Work on the flinch motion
9m02s Do a save line, two straight jokes missed
9m23s Smile more with the dad character
10m12s Pause after dumpster
10m24s Rephrase to “comes home from the hospital”
Overall: Started out strong for the first 6-7 minutes, then really slowed down the last 3 minutes. Be more proactive with save lines and going back to crowd work.
