Going up early at the music and comedy mic
httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=hha_N78XmuI
2m13s Second and third part of this needs work
2m38s This needs a stronger line than knitting sweaters
3m40s Say “gruesome” instead of “horrifying”
4m22s Cut this
4m34s Cut or rework the hotel bit
5m05s Cut the wall to wall funerals
5m28s Pause after “don’t worry”
5m40s The “alone” line should be in the crazy voice and the “dangerous out there” in the normal voice
6m15s Try the setup in the crazy voice too
6m48s That’s new and a keeper
7m15s Cut the cocker spaniel line
8m00s Nice to see it start working really well the third time I try this joke
Overall: Two of my newest jokes got applause breaks and four or five fell flat, so that’s a win.
