Performance Critique: July 25

The Sunday writer’s mic

http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=D7zNE8_yG2Y

httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=D7zNE8_yG2Y

1m42s Make the fast forwarding motion clearer

3m48s Make the premise clearer

4m03s Change “would” to “might”

4m33s “Retweet” should be the last word in the sentence

4m55s Change the order, rehab then crabs

Overall: Working out newer jokes, there’s potential but they need to be reworded a bit…

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