The 10:30 show
httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=FKtF_BY_LTs
1m56s Just noticed that line gets a laugh when I put a big emphasis on the word “Facebook” (which makes sense)
2m16s Get rid of “Jenny likes this” or think of a stronger third punch line
3m02s The “by the way” messed up that punch line
3m44s I need to be more clear that I’m offering alternate suggestions
4m05s Instead of “I’m doing this” make the growling sound
4m20s Get rid of the New Jersey thing
4m59s Good job telling him how my mom is cooler than his date
5m49s Say “I don’t mean to give the game away” more slyly, like I did it by accident
6m37s It’s almost worse when my second to last punch line (“fanbase”) getting a great laugh and then my last line (“huge tubes”) gets nothing than when they both get no laughs
Overall: I worked out brand new stuff in front of a Friday night crowd, which I hadn’t had the balls to do before. The new joke isn’t as tight as it needs to be but it’s always good when a new joke at least partially works.
