At a writer’s mic
httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=MrmDfnOGkTo
0m51s Cut the fractions line
4m54s The sad delivery is better than the aggressive delivery of the DVD line
6m20s Add a “that’s ridiculous right? that’s like saying…” to make it more emotional and conversational
8m06s Find a better way to get to that ending
Overall: About as good as an open mic can go. Although the biggest laughs were from interacting with disruptive crowd members.
