Category: Performance Critiques

The 8:30 show

httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=UXCgHaVdmr0

0m18s I said “model” in a weird way

0m40s It’s never good to tell the audience the joke would be better 40 seconds in to a set

1m31s Rewatching the set, I don’t like them

2m56s Pause for a second after asking “do you know how much it costs?”

3m12s Too much stumbling over words

3m34s I made up that line on the spot, but it should be a keeper. “You look like you might know the slogan”

4m21s I need a better “moral of the story”

Overall: Not a great set but I made up a decent punch line on the spot, so it wasn’t for naught.

A Thursday night show

httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=_ACvp2Zaiho

1m39s The laugh is all in the smile after the “when have you ever come first?” line

2m52s This is the first time I’m trying this joke on stage, and it’s getting laughs, but still needs tightening

3m31s Get rid of a bunch of words, so that it’s only “or if we wanna simplify it: Nature’s Draino”

6m16s I like this alliteration joke, but it doesn’t work, time to kill it

Overall: Decent: My new morning after pill joke needs to be tightened up but it got laughs, and my Russian immigrant material is progressing.

This is me MCing

httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=zAd8fAluvqM

0m46s Calling out the obvious drink order situation was still funny

1m58s Pretty funny that I checked if the guy’s daughter was 18 first

2m47s The tennis joke needs to be delivered slower

4m05s It later turned out they weren’t from Cuba, but some other foreign country

5m05s Good call out on her answering for everyone

5m49s Shouldn’t say “cancel relationship” twice

7m05s His explanation didn’t make it any clearer

Part 2 – Additional audience walked in and I had time to do more material

httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=wOjEyXueFtE

2m12s The “cause you know I don’t need that shit” should be in a lower tone

3m16s Good reaction to the crowd’s groan

3m43s Throw in “waitress, can we double check her id?” after the previous line

4m05s Add “which if you got four kids, he probably did”

5m42s Nice call out on “oh, that’s too far?”

Overall: This was one of my better MCing jobs as I was high energy and had a few decent crowd work bits. I think the key to MCing that I should focus on is being much more high energy than I am during my regular set.

Another day, another show

httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=78Jt_rJvqJ4

0m35s Say “tennis” in a more flat tone

1m58s The premise could be tightened

2m04s Get rid of “Ringlish” line

3m18s No need to say “fail math” twice

4m16s Change body positions when doing a different character, to make it more obvious

5m44s Unfortunately they didn’t jump me as cougars after the show

Overall: I worked out a lot of newer jokes and parts of each one got laughs, so I just need to rework and tighten them

Two Saturday nights in a row where I only did one show, it’s nice to get paid occasionally 🙂

httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=9CjWzvIFTxk

0m56s Someone in the audience said “it’s true” so I repeated it and got a bigger laugh than usual

2m06s The eyes moving around confused are what get the big laughs on this punch line

2m27s Instead of “get out of it” it should be “how you break up online”

3m07s If I waited another second, the rest of the audience would’ve gotten it

4m35s Great instantaneous reaction

6m10s I shouldn’t repeat that line

6m27s Nice response by the audience member

6m47s Get rid of the “first of all” and “second of all” part

7m36s Say “I don’t mean to give the game away” more slyly

7m48s I should’ve said “who’d you cuddle, my mom?”

Overall: Pretty good set, but I need to tighten the “toy boy” part of the joke