Category: Performance Critiques

An open mic with five people in the audience

httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=Psg8_RNO3q4

0m18s Don’t say “I haven’t made this funny yet”

0m35s Rephrase to “How much did you pay her, for chance encounter?”

1m41s Yell out “remix” louder and commit to it more

2m57s Say the photo stuff up front, before doing the old woman act out

3m23s Brand new joke

3m54s It should just be “peach” not “peach schnapps”

5m37s Sound more reminiscent

6m58s Don’t stumble on words

Overall: The netflix joke has worked a couple of times in a row, even at a tiny five person open mic like this, that means I should try it at a real show. The vacation photo joke needs to be a lot shorter.

A mostly musicians open mic, I’m getting brought up to the stage at 3:50 in the morning

httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=P_G481Pf1s8

0m46s I love that the host actually makes people shut up, like here

2m14s Make record scratching sounds before yelling “remix”

2m52s The better response is “that’s cause we had to go shopping”

7m22s Add on “I might as well make you my manager”

Overall: The fact that I was able to perform at all at 4am is impressive, laughs at this hour are just a bonus

Early evening open mic with five comics

httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=uEot4GDtUXA

0m32s Change “you’ve” to “you”

5m19s No need to say “I wanted you to know”

6m23s Don’t switch it up, if I planned to do all my new mom jokes, I should stick with it

7m11s Sound more dreamy about the statistics, like they’re amazing

8m48s Kill the cycle part of the joke

Part 2

httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=4cnFk8MkDXw

0m46s Do some record scratching sounds before yelling out “remix”

Overall: The netflix joke seems to be ready for a real audience, and some of the other jokes need more tweaking.

A restaurant basement show for 10-12 people

httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=jQ6f6NgSj28

2m02s This version of the “cancel relationship” joke isn’t working as well as the previous version

2m26s Instead of “I have a confession to make” it should be “you should know”

6m27s My lips look rather awkward while I’m tap dancing, try smiling

7m37s I’m glad this semi call-back worked

8m44s Change “women” to “sexual partners”

Overall: I had consistent (albeit small) laughs throughout. The newer Russian mom stuff seems to be working in front of real crowds.

An open mic

httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=_9tg1-5MWqs

1m02s Change “this great bit” to “this gem”

1m52s Change “no chess prodigy” to “not chess prodigy”

3m29s No need for the “with or” part of the punch line

5m54s Don’t say “and” on the second example

Overall: Working out newer stuff, all of it still needs adjustments but none of it needs to be completely forgotten…