An open mic
httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=fpGJSxu1Eoo
1m10s I need to think of a way to ask so many questions in a row without it seeming weird
1m31s Get rid of ice cream trucks
2m33s Make the Mercedes line less wordy
3m40s Cut this whole joke
4m03s Say “radar” not “detector”
4m18s Flap my arms once per time that the homeless character talks
5m34s Needs a stronger ending
Overall: Working out newer material, some of it’s better than others
Doing my show in Queens
httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=6kZPvnt1KOY
1m37s Say “truck” not “van” cause I already said van earlier
4m29s Get rid of the fluctuating god bit
6m16s I’m talking faster than usual cause it’s the only chance to get bar people to pay attention
Part 2
httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=xG0aqYb8mKA
1m24s My girl voice needs to stay the same throughout
3m05s If I call that out, I should start doing another joke, not force my way back into this one
4m02s Good little improv line
7m01s This joke needs a different ending
Overall: I powered through a noisy bar set
An open mic
httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=LMWt02im7RE
0m18s I missed the word “van”
0m57s Don’t pause after “contract”
1m34s Kill “kid trucks”
2m08s Rephrase to “ohh, yeah, Cats, the musical”
2m59s Think of something better than Gucci dress
3m59s I don’t like the fluctuating god joke
5m11s I need to get to the “less liquid” part sooner
6m07s Play up each of the grains of sand more
Overall: The mobile adoption center needs to be tightened, I can get rid of the fluctuating belief in god and the sand bit still needs to be figured out
MCing the Sunday Writers Mic
httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=8RmbvK2TI7g
0m20s Slow down and sound more confused
0m32s Reword to “van full of kids”
0m41s Slow down!
0m51s Get rid of the bike messenger part
1m18s Kill international part
1m38s Kill the king cone part
2m20s Say “when you got singing kids with cell phones” instead
Overall: I worked out one new joke and can already see which parts need to go, I need to slow WAY down on this joke though and play up my confusion
The Saturday night show
httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=8nvhvcnljxM
0m10s Stop calling out the bad claps, or figure out a funnier way to do it
1m18s Turn my head to another part of the room before saying “in the first hour”
4m06s First laugh of the sand joke, forty seconds in, that’s too long before a laugh
4m16s Do three pictures, not four
4m31s Second laugh, took another 25 seconds
5m31s That got a good response, but it was too long between laughs
5m50s Cut the seconds part
6m08s A fourth laugh in 2.5 minutes, this joke needs serious tightening
6m10s Brought them back
7m19s Don’t do the “table 2” cough
8m28s Cut the eucharist
8m59s Get rid of “for a pamphlet”
Part 2
httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=XErFmJjoPhU
1m09s Take a more thoughtful pause
Overall: The old stuff worked well and I can now see where the photo joke needs tightening
