Category: Performance Critiques

Sunday writer’s mic

httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=WHhSH75ERAM

0m20s Awkward pauses are funny

0m40s Instead of “do a joke about this” say “talk about this on stage”

0m58s Say “send guys to Ben’s new camp”, I missed “guys” in that setup

1m34s Don’t do the baby spleen crack analogy, HD TV is stronger

2m35s I need to start this joke with almost getting run over by a jogger

2m53s Make it more of a rock song than a rap song

Overall: Worked out some newer jokes, some have potential but they need more work

Saturday 8pm show

httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=gTkaiiPRYAA

2m42s Get rid of “the wine”

2m46s Don’t make “would you let Jesus shave you?” into a question, make it into a statement

3m41s Just say “I’ll wave my hand till you laugh”

4m10s I can stop after “weight of failed expectations” no need for “for son”

4m39s Not a strong enough of a punch

6m20s Need a better punch than “straight jacket”

Part 2

httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=U7j7FMkcdSk

Overall: Good ten minute set, especially since I’m still figuring out a bunch of these jokes.

Friday night show

httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=dTgVyCnLZvI

0m55s Pause another second before “maybe”

2m43s Don’t add “the wine”

5m11s Instead of “do that” say “make a website like that for”

6m46s Funny improvised statement

7m36s The biggest laugh was when it wasn’t material

7m56s Checking getting dropped towards the end of my set

Overall: Decent but not great. It started out stronger than it ended.

A show at a Hostel, with a mostly international crowd

httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=6wxczhuX69Q

3m55s I need a different end to this joke

4m16s I don’t need to verify this that much

7m53s Milk the “eye fucking” line for longer

Overall: Solid set, but the Jewel joke isn’t getting enough laughs throughout the bit.

An afternoon open mic

httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=7Yz6GK_vGIc

1m35s I didn’t set up this joke enough, it doesn’t make sense

4m14s Not sure if that’s too far

4m22s At least I admit it

Overall: Considering how bad this open mic usually goes, this was respectable. I tried some newer jokes in the middle, they have promise but need work.