Category: Performance Critiques

The 8pm show

httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=32HnAEkUbnI

0m44s Change the hair dryer and gun line

3m36s Be more expressive on “let Jesus shave you”

4m34s I can end the act out on “I love that Donkey”

5m30s I might be able to get rid of the line “and then Jewel screwed me over”

6m21s Combine this into one line, “Zeus Inc booked me here tonight”

7m55s Good job dealing with the phone going off

Overall: Decent but not great.

The 8pm show

httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=RAuE4Dy0xTY

2m43s Missed the word “like” before knocking

3m52s Change to “When’d you see Shrek?”

4m18s If the fake out doesn’t wwork like here, over explain it even more

6m41s Take a beat between “I like that one too” and my next line

8m35s This joke isn’t ready for prime time

9m22s I got the light and ended but the MC wasn’t in the room so I couldn’t leave the stage

Overall: Decent but awkward ending

A warm up mic before a real show

httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=NtYem8-4EYU

1m56s Say this before the “I actually love my dad” line

2m53s Make the sound effects and make the concept clearer

4m42s Change heroin to something more believable

Overall: Tighten the jokes.

A third mic

httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=VRqBvRw1q_s

0m57s The “What are you up to?” doesn’t fit

3m20s Pause a little longer after this one

Overall: Working out the same jokes a few times in one night, they still need work

Another mic

httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=B987Y_jHzME

0m43s Change “rough” to “tough”

1m34s Cut the genre part

3m04s Sell the “I’m gonna fast forward this” more

3m59s Get rid of the “I know that intellectually” part

4m26s Cut the Kant joke

5m23s This joke needs a stronger end

Overall: Decent. These jokes could use some trimming though.