Category: Performance Critiques

An open mic

httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=Kzav3gcPhQ0

0m59s No need for the “it’s not it’s intended purpose” line

1m23s Change my left hand motion to make it like she’s knocking me away from her mid section

2m00s Pause after “www”

2m38s Pick either “drunk” or “high” no need for both

3m10s Cut the bar graph of rates line

4m52s Kill the porn star plumber example

Overall: I tried out rewritten versions of old jokes, and while the room was kinda dead, it still helps to watch it and see what parts don’t sound right

Another bar show

httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=3fQrXxzZZHA

0m24s Ask a little more politely

1m05s Cut “use it as a phone” and “it’s a lousy baseball”

2m45s Say “challenged” instead

3m01s Don’t talk over it, acknowledge it and say “that’s not even the funny part”

4m35s Great improvised lines

5m12s I should’ve have forced my way back into this joke after the interruption

6m45s That’s funny

9m28s This part is much weaker than the first part of the Yelp joke

Part 2

httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=VGANwmzukjU

0m48s I’m stepping on laughs, slow down on this joke

Overall: Good set and good job messing around with the audience. The second part of the Yelp joke needs work.

A bar show, the camera and audio is about 40 feet away from the stage

httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=WyBqqOoWSl4

3m03s Good job to keep hitting the improvised joke

3m45s Good job going back to the mom joke by mumbling about her for a few seconds like I was remembering what I was saying. That’s much better than going straight back into a joke. Of course, it’s better to just bail out of it completely.

5m29s Keep swinging my hips the whole time I do this character

7m08s Good job responding to his “I’ll give you twenty bucks”

Part 2

httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=7Vm2GiMaJME

Overall: Great set and great job playing off of what the crowd was saying and getting a lot of laughs each time I was interrupted

A mic

httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=kig_ZFVw4rw

1m47s No need for the word “tomorrow”

1m52s No need for the line “this clip is going straight to your Facebook wall”

3m26s Reconsider the “bar chart of their prices” line

4m58s Don’t change “car salesman” and “sell cars” it has to be the exact same line

Overall: The newer versions of the Netflix joke and the Cum Like You joke are getting there, but the cool nerd concept needs work

Doing a set towards the end of my Queens show

httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=jSJzoQjyNt4

1m28s Cut the beer bottle whistle idea

1m45s It should be “soft degree” not “soft paper”

2m51s Just bail out of the joke at this point

4m30s Put my arm out against the wall for a better pose

6m10s Make a joke there, or make the next joke related to my question

Part 2

httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=k647hnAgFEc

1m19s Nice save by being honest

Overall: Weak set, I need to stop thinking out loud if the thinking is about how the set is currently going.