Category: Performance Critiques

A 6PM Show

httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=rH82Tc–p7Q

0m58s Put the emphasis on “your” and try putting “flush” towards the end of the sentence

Overall: A very average, very short set.

The 8PM Show

httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=oLOAD1ikoa4

0m35s Kill “it’s a lousy discus”

0m58s Make the bottle blowing sound a few more times

1m37s Wait for the laughs to stop before pointing the gun

3m22s Smile as I do the poses

4m00s I love these groans

4m48s Nice improvised line

Overall: Great set with multiple applause breaks. If a punch line didn’t land in a set like this, I’m way more likely to cut it

A 6:30 Show for 8 or 10 people

httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=Du9cD0ReDVQ

0m49s Do the sound for longer, or better yet don’t do this part of the joke

3m04s Add the word “either” after “my mom doesn’t like that joke”

3m30s I forgot the second half of the line, it should be “I told my mom I’d do modeling and commercials”

4m00s Keep moving my hips the whole time for this character

Overall: Weak. I should’ve went back to flirting with the girls once material wasn’t getting me anywhere.

A mic

httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=iN30dXEkf-U

0m34s Change “sex partner” to “lay”

1m12s Cut this tag

1m59s Face the same person who I said “I like your shoes” for the start of the joke

3m30s Change “masters” to “college”

5m09s Make a joke about it after saying “I wasn’t gonna be a dick and make a joke about it”

Overall: Nothing special, working out rewritten jokes

A bar show for three audience members

httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=Jrm0RBaHz-8

0m56s Change “masters degree” back to “college diploma”

4m14s Funny cause he was sitting with his mom

4m55s Pause longer before saying anything

6m23s Say “so it’s worth it” in a more matter of fact way

Overall: Not great not terrible and I got to listen to some background music while watching this tape.