Late night after the show has been going for 2.5+ hours
httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=1O5NrMxJDZQ
0m20s I look really fat from the side, work on my posture
1m33s Take longer pauses between each phrase
2m02s I’m flying through my mom’s act outs, which is why the laughs aren’t there
5m46s Smile a little bit while saying that
Overall: Decent especially considering how long they’d been there, but the suicide joke hasn’t been hitting as hard lately.
A Sunday night bar show
httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=kYrIYPVZwAA
0m40s I seem pissed off, don’t
2m42s Stop after each of those lines, I’m going too fast
4m38s My third favorite response after laughter and applause is someone choking on their drink/food
6m10s Completely unnecessary sidebar, but it’s funny to me
6m49s Make the diagram much bigger and do each part with a different hand
7m18s Add a couple of more thoughts after “Do we want him to follow us home?” like “That could be fun” and “We’ve always wanted a New York adventure”
7m58s Say “Mom before daughter”, not “Mom and daughter”
Part 2
httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=tQDKnRy9z_k
1m32s I need to figure out how to get people on board with that joke
Overall: Ehh. I got laughs but they weren’t that loud. The mobile adoption center joke still doesn’t work, so I shouldn’t end on it.
The Sunday writer’s mic
httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=w0719iME_6Q
0m43s Deliver the scratched line more playfully
1m25s Say it more playfully, don’t deadpan
2m43s Try changing “TiVo” to “DVR”
Overall: I tried to change the ending of an old joke and added a callback to it, and then tried out a new joke that needs work
The 8pm show
httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=09dVkl9ThbY
0m43s Good job addressing the situation, as I could see people turning around and looking
1m36s It’s always fun to make up what the audience is saying, the key is to do it quickly before they actually say something and correct you
3m45s This is working really well now
4m33s I can throw in a joke about the waitresses here too
4m54s Call out the guy who’s applauding
6m14s An applause break during checks is pretty rare
6m42s I might want to address the “whoooo…” and make a joke about it
Overall: I was doing great til the checks came then I did just okay, but at least I was able to keep partial attention throughout checks
The 8pm show
httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=a60_zAlGOGg
5m28s Try saying, “it’s okay, it’s starting to turn me on”
5m46s Pause before “so I just bought them all”
6m26s Keep the same voice throughout that line
6m54s Call out the “half the room is republican” thing
Overall: Weird set. The laughs weren’t as loud as usual but I got a couple of short applause breaks. At least I didn’t get unexpected groans during the shoes joke.
