Category: Performance Critiques

MCing a bar show

httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=_oaa52_rHcM

0m44s Delivery her line harder

1m41s Try “sales of ninja stars” or delve into why she only said “sales” cause that’s really general

2m35s I should’ve milked that for much longer than six seconds

6m20s I should’ve added on about needing to get a sponge bath or something

7m42s Hold the watch for longer

Part 2 – Time between comics

httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=6_J_sGByr5U

Overall: Mediocre. I didn’t push myself to do crowd work as much as I should’ve and I wasn’t as high energy as I should be as a host.

An open mic

httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=6XtStFYVVog

0m57s Deliver this while smiling, not while angry

1m44s Try saying “that basically means” instead of just “basically”

2m43s Act out the waitress putting the plate down and saying it

3m03s Finish more of the marriage sentence before interrupting myself

4m20s Try that as an actual line

Overall: Working stuff out at a mic, I might’ve improvised a good line about not knowing the word for non dysfunctional family

Opening for a sketch comedy show

httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=AiTKjqkAM2A

2m07s Rephrase that better, “I’m glad only one person got that, for the rest of you that means four years of your life weren’t flushed down the toilet”

5m10s I improvised this part, but there’s something in there

5m30s Applause break after twenty awkward seconds, I’ll take it

6m16s Try “clinic” instead of “rally”

7m42s It seems like the jehovah’s model joke is weaker than my other two mom bits

8m09s Pause between “bought them all” and calling out the fork

8m39s Add a bring it

8m42s Try “Sir, have you been telling jokes tonight” and improvise about that more

9m00s Don’t use the word “whore house”

Part 2

httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=vmM4FmGQdMo

1m52s I bailed out on the last part of this joke, and that’s the part I wanted to test

Overall: Really good set with two legit applause breaks. I should’ve finished the newer joke towards the end and called out the fork dropping better as it messed up the timing of one of the jokes.

Going up 2.5+ hours into a show

httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=uf06mbq4pRw

3m39s Maybe I shouldn’t dead pan the delivery on that line

4m34s Rephrase to “talk higher”

Overall: Decent considering how long the audience had been there. The voting joke is getting better but still not fully there.

The writer’s mic

httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=wEQD6cbulxg

1m47s Instead of “I mean.. what a bargain” try “I know.. what a bargain”

2m02s Stop myself in the middle of the word “jersey”

2m18s Cut the celebrity part of the joke

2m54s Get to the impression quicker

Overall: Working out jokes. The new poster joke has potential.