Category: Performance Critiques

Going first on the 8pm show

httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=hnLm6xEh42s

1m39s It sounds like I was going through puberty during the mom act out cause I’m a little sick

3m49s Scrunch the face first, then put the hand on the hip, then go down in the stance

4m12s I need a better punchline here

4m55s Good job implementing an improvised lined from last night into the joke tonight

7m37s Pause after “thanks for the tip”

Overall: Solid set for going first on a show. I did only “A” jokes but I had a couple of new lines in them and the two new lines hit hard.

Tye 8PM Friday show

httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=qd4nZtu6MtU

0m38s Say it the way I usually say it, “I’m trying to go there again tonight, don’t ruin this for me” instead of the “you” tense that I said it in

1m55s Weird pause before job

2m13s Pause after “scared of my mom”

2m52s I shouldn’t have gone for a high five there, but he was really close to me and it seemed funny

3m20s Address the high five sooner

5m01s It was louder in the club than the video shows

6m59s Good improvisation, make it part of the joke

7m25s The guy was dressed in an army getup

8m09s I should’ve said, “wow, you guys really love shoes”

8m38s Add “I’m like a substitute teacher now”

9m06s Repeat “Jessica” then laugh, as doing my impression of them

Part 2

httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=CkuutQX16DY

Overall: It was a loud disruptive crowd and I wasn’t able to get through a lot of my jokes but I did a good job of not being phased, going with the flow and playing off of the crowd. I still prefer crowds that actually listen though.

A music and comedy mic, after a two week vacation

httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=1_WnThCRZHY

0m22s The song lyrics were “If you wanna do good, do good, if you wanna do bad, make a duvet” and I thought it was funny

2m02s Commit to singing this more

3m14s Cut this line

5m28s And keep cutting until around here

5m29s Play on the bartender’s comment more

6m05s I should write on stage more so I get better at this

Overall: Bad in a good way: I tried 4 minutes of brand new jokes that weren’t even fully written, and there’s at least 15 decent seconds in there.

Going last, 2.5 hours into a show with a few people left

httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=KOLWae93rao

2m03s Have a funnier response

3m44s Smile more while doing this joke, so the satire is a little more obvious

4m42s Stop doing the hand motion after “wait wait wait”

Overall: I got a couple of good laughs and ended strong but in general it was a weak set. The waiting in lines joke, which is the one I’m working on, didn’t really hit.

The writer’s mic

httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=RoMLUrKNDo0

2m36s I need to setup the overcrowded heaven idea better but I think the act outs have potential

3m37s Act out the waitress

Overall: Eh. Work on the heaven joke.