Category: Performance Critiques

Dec 8b

MCing a bar show with 6-8 audience members

httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=84CBzUmZKLs

2m39s Change “is paying for” to “bought”

3m27s Awkward jump from crowd work back into material, try repeating “Israel” like I’m thinking about it before doing the actual joke

6m28s Don’t actually go around the whole room

7m18s Go into the powerpoint joke I do

9m28s This joke needs a stronger ending

Part 2

httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=V3oGlzRQBxM

Overall: Decent job MCing but I could be even more energetic.

An open mic

httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=GHDqt0F7184

0m43s Add in “I sleep with women above 20”

1m52s Change “while” to “and”

3m37s Change “come on in” to “enjoy your trip”

3m55s Smile while doing this joke

Overall: Decent for a mic. I did three new jokes at the start, one of which, the “you don’t live too far” has decent potential.

Closing out my Astoria show

httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=PUqyMbQMsFU

0m22s Have the word “floor” in that sentence

1m12s Don’t lean back on a punch line

1m38s Ask a little more about the birthday instead of just acknowledging it without any follow up

2m31s Stay in character when getting the comics to quiet down, and go into it for more than a one liner

3m55s Reword so “Eddie Murphy” is last

5m52s Try adding “I’m not pandering to you people”

7m22s Say all of this in my head and just go into the next joke

8m27s Deliver all of the nobel prize stuff more naturally, it feels forced and acted

9m18s I should’ve said “right, birthday boy?”

Part 2

httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=LPFsWvxeeYQ

1m47s Throw in a “how do you think I felt?” before the survivor song

Overall: Lousy. I had a couple of big laughs but it was mostly weak. I should’ve done more crowd work since material wasn’t really working.

Hosting the Sunday writer’s mic

httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=qev6Fm4HRjo

0m29s Use the word “above” not “over”

0m45s Cut the dorm wall studying lines

1m47s Reword the act out

2m02s Change “mother’s” to “mom’s”

3m03s It should be “pro Arab” not “pro Palestine”

4m18s Say the line without stuttering

Overall: Eh. I worked two brand new jokes at the start, they’ll have potential once I memorize them.

Going second on the 8PM Show

httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=4WFWHZujIbw

3m35s No need for this part of the joke, especially after it gets a laugh

3m57s Never perform these last 22 seconds again

6m03s Smile a little more in the delivery

7m24s Add in “cause we killed your savior”

8m34s This is horribly worded, fix it

Overall: Solid set but there were a few awkward moments, I brought the crowd back every time it happened, but that ruined the momentum of the set. And three of my newer jokes are coming along, they just need a little more finessing.