A bar show with 6-8 audience members
httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=ChBHey-cRVY
2m55s Pause after “security didn’t like that answer as much as you guys did”
5m02s No need to say “you fucks”
6m48s Say “I was happy about it” before “twice the toys and…”
7m05s Change “positive side” to “upside”
Overall: I remember this going a lot better in person than it sounds on the tape. There are consistent laughs but they’re not that loud.
An open mic
httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=X31eZWZYHfk
3m01s The pause should be after “in”
3m23s Change “latchkey” to “neglect”
3m27s Say “the legos tripled” happier
3m59s Cut everything after “neuro divorce” until here
4m47s More emphasis on “If I REALLY like you”
Overall: Decent for a mic. Some parts need to be cut out.
MCing my Tuesday show
httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=9TyCnLSmNig
0m45s Make a joke sooner
2m30s I think this joke is funny but I’ve yet to find the delivery that will make it work
4m31s Rewrite or cut the proceeding joke
Part 2
httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=1KsBYUcl4zE
1m51s Pause for another half second after “what’s more American than”
2m20s Wait for the clapping to stop before starting to talk, even if I’m playing off of what the previous comic said
2m55s Pause after “the opportunity to”
Overall: Average for a small show. I didn’t do any crowd work as the MC because I knew everyone in the audience, so it would’ve been weird.
The Sunday writer’s mic
httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=mKYHJ1-bin4
2m53s Try just saying “shame and embarassment”
Overall: I did four old jokes because I had a new line in each one that I wanted to try out.
The 8pm show
httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=QwObi33Vls8
0m51s Always nice when I open with a new joke and it hits
1m38s That would’ve gotten a bigger laugh if I didn’t stumble over my words
1m53s Smile after that line
3m42s This should go before the “she just gave me a look like” line
Overall: Solid set. The new Israeli security joke did really well but the Israeli bus thing needs a stronger delivery to make it work.
