A 10pm show for 5 or 6 people
httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=H1WpxwwTIvk
0m40s Say “I’m not sure why you’re laughing” instead of “don’t laugh”
4m58s I improvised that line, and it’s going into the act
6m48s This part feels forced. I need to find a different way to do this material.
8m21s Say that line angrier
9m06s Make these last few sentences clearer
Overall: Really good first six minutes. I need to figure out a better way to work in the Russian mom material while doing the new persona.
An open mic
httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=k5F79yRv8Zg
1m39s Change “you have a striking resembelance” back to “she also complained”
3m34s Change to “we need OUR privacy”
5m11s No need for the window line
5m30s Weak joke
6m59s Change the hand that’s holding the mic after that line
Overall: Standard weak open mic response.
A bar show
httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=VVkvRwqWwZw
1m02s Don’t say “like”
1m16s Add in “everyone knows”
2m08s Cut the striking resembelance line
4m40s Say the line a little angrier
Overall: I bombed, my materials didn’t work nor did my save lines.
Hosting the Sunday writer’s mic
httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=Y7TqHIzZq6A
0m19s Stare out into the audience while moving the mic stand
1m37s Change to “she also complained”
2m49s Say the line harder
3m08s Say “I’m an organ donor. Just yesterday I donated…”
3m38s Rephrase to “You’d be surprised how often Jesus would use…”
4m01s Rephrase to “The only place I kill at is…”
4m48s Say the cat line towards the start of the bit
Overall: A lot of the newer jokes are almost there, they just need some rephrasing
The 8PM show
httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=xalpIikHYS4
1m32s Interesting that it’s a slow laugh that keeps going
2m42s Nice
4m39s She said “Wait a minute, I can’t breathe” and I broke character for a second. Don’t break character
11m33s I should do the crazy laugh when that line doesn’t get a laugh
Overall: This was the strongest the dark persona has done. I was getting laughs before I even started talking.
