Going last on an 8:30 show
httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=_nqvvkGXe7o
0m49s Good addition, sentence can be smoother though
2m29s Smile more while saying this
3m08s Nice improvising on my own weird comment
Overall: Good set, did newer stuff and it went fairly well.
An open mic with some live audience
httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=SICyxzuQR6k
2m37s Think of a different delivery to get laughs after each complaint
2m59s Make a better boob motion
3m05s More emphasis on “prepay”
6m23s Reword to “I guess everyone in the room” instead of “I just learned”
Overall: Good for a mic
Going up 2.5+ hours into the show with 10 out of 100 audience members left
httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=59LD7wZlUWg
0m25s Should’ve improvised for another twelve seconds so everyone who had already decided to leave could leave before going into my material
1m37s Don’t hold the mic stand for that long in a row
5m15s Say “ladies” instead of “girls”
6m29s If responding to the audience reaction say “either way” before going into the last line of “I guess I’m just a romantic”
Overall: Pretty bad even given the circumstances. My save lines barely worked.
Another mic
httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=H5FAmG0x8_k
1m13 Nice response to the joke
1m20s Find a stronger ending
4m39s Sell the “no, not a women’s prison” more
5m58s It should be sock puppets, not hand puppets
Overall: Okay for a mic, the first joke hit really hard.
The 8:30 show for ten or so audience members
httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=x7G2_9by3Es
0m34s Change the voice to be more kid like, and not mentally challenged
3m08s This isn’t the spot for her to say “Ben”
4m18s Also not a good spot for her to say “Ben”
4m36s Try doing the call back in a little kid’s voice
Overall: Ok set. The new bit at the end went well but I need to work on the voice/expressions for the little girl and figure out the call back.
