Second show of the night
httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=DKsTXFMPdMY
1m08s Pause between “then you got” and “huge tubes”
1m44s Rhetorically ask the crowd “Do you know what the worst part of breaking up is?” instead of just telling them
2m57s Say the three words with a one second pause between each one
3m45s I said “she actually means it” in a weird tone
Overall: This set was only four minutes long, the main thing I noticed is I should slow down.
The 8PM show
httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=Kq2cRUJcqHs
1m02s Too much emphasis on “that”, not enough emphasis on “tubes”
1m22s I missed the words “This leads to” before “Ben’s practical tip of the week”
2m31s I messed up the Jehovahs witness punch line, I think I forgot the line right before I was gonna do it, you can see the pause
3m13s I should’ve gotten out of this joke after the “I just assume they’re deaf”
3m37s I gotta remember the “I’ll try not to break it up” line
5m29s I need to react to the audience members response when I ask them
5m51s Getting laughs on two of my last three lines is my current par for the course
Overall: Decent set but I could’ve talked slower the whole time. I found one line that I improvised that I need to start using consistently
This is the midnight show
httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=yRje032PFpw
1m11s The mic is a little loud, I should’ve adjusted better
1m48s I like how I spent 10 seconds trying to get a better look at a woman’s breasts in the back
2m52s I don’t do this joke that often anymore, it’s good to know it still gets a laugh
3m02s No need to interrupt myself here with the “stand up comic, not a stand up guy”
4m15s The checks are starting to get dropped
4m42s Deliver each word slower
5m19s I pointed to older people for the yearbook reference
6m22s Get into the joke while still looking at the people I asked about their first date, it’ll make it more conversational
7m32s Pause and look at the crowd for a few seconds before saying it
9m34s It’s never good when I have to go into more than one “if you don’t laugh” joke
Part 2
httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=ffjpVZx7fYU
Overall: I did well until all the checks were dropped, then I just focused on the few people who were actually listening instead of paying their bill. One day I’ll be funny enough were nobody bothers to look at their checks until I’m off the stage.
Second show of the night, I Mced this show.
httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=5GG0_R0OXv4
0m30s I’ve written this before, but I keep forgetting not to open a set with the ex girlfriend on the street joke.
1m30s Too much material and not enough crowd work at this point of the set
2m10s My energy needs to be higher
3m15s I love how the crowd usually laughs at this observation
4m18s Always fun when the crowd answers a question that’s meant to be rhetorical
4m38s Change the vocal tonality to be more accidental on “I don’t mean to give the game away”
5m26s And it’s a bad set when all three punch lines at the end don’t get any laughs.
Overall: I didn’t do a good job as MC. I should’ve done more crowd work and too many of my jokes didn’t hit.
Back at Broadway Comedy Club
httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=MtrlBwdKlU0
0m41s It should be “people find out I do stand up” and not “I do comedy”
1m13s I missed saying “If you do that” before “then you got huge tubes”
1m27s I convinced the group up front to come to the show and they asked that I make fun of them during my set, meth dealer was the best I could come up with
2m10s I need to pause longer between each word of “it… costs… money”
2m45s This is currently my favorite one liner joke
3m13s I’ve since learned not to go with all 3 lines about the homeless girlfriend unless the audience laughs at the second one, or else they start to dislike you
4m46s I get more laughs when I say “that shit is demasculating” not “that is”
5m22s I love when all three punch lines at the end of my set get a laugh
Overall: This was a really good although short set. The jdate joke could’ve hit better, and I shouldn’t have done all three lines of the ex girlfriend on the street.
