Category: Comedy

The 8pm show

httpv://youtu.be/oc_s7DP4SHM

3m05s Put hand on hip for “thanks” not earlier

4m14s Needs a stronger punch line

5m08s Replace the one room line

5m16s “Eating daily” not funny enough, go back to looking both ways

5m34s Needs a better line then quitting grad school

5m50s Cut or rewrite the America line

7m02s Not sure that “we’re not married” is strong enough

8m37s Say “get on board” more playfully

9m19s Could’ve gone and asked which of those complaints apply

Overall: Started strong and ended strong and worked on a new bit in the middle, that needs more work

The 8pm show

httpv://youtu.be/sB7yMD-ufEE

0m38s Doesn’t sound conversational yet

1m02s Good pause

4m28s Head went down a little late and out of sync

Overall: Slow first minute but then got on a good roll

Late night at a comedy and music mic, after a six minute intro

httpv://youtu.be/3Gfr_pelJKE

4m39s The camp one is weak, cut it

5m13s I can start the “glo” sound before interrupting

6m10s Cut the American dream part

6m54s The tickets to America is weak, cut it

8m03s Cut the fired at line

Overall: Really good set and good job taking my time to ease into material.

Opening the 7pm show

httpv://youtu.be/KfjxQExPe-M

2m44s Set this up slightly clearer

3m55s Open eyes wider during blinks

4m14s That’s also not the right punch line there

6m03s They high fived, kinda funny

6m16s Try saying “for our first date” more seductively

Overall: Steady but weak laughs.

Opening the 7:30 show

httpv://youtu.be/UTszIOJqEFw

1m05s Good in room awareness to add the “proud of it” comment

1m41s The “maybe” should be whispered more

3m59s Last name line doesn’t work either

5m08s I should say “don’t awww” and go right into it instead of “yeah”

Overall: Average set. Got steady laughs throughout but not many huge laughs.