Category: Comedy

Hosting my Queens show

httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=HtOj5dGOEY8

1m42s Hold up the gun more convincingly

3m39s Repeat the whole job title first, then translate it to bullshit artist

9m24s It should be “banged” then “nailed” not the same word twice

Part 2

httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=q6QykMmYj_4

0m34s Doing time between comics

2m50s After saying “fast forward that” once, make the sound effect

3m07s Change “it’s acting” to “she’s acting”

3m54s Cut the whole “fire cool… I know that intellectually”

Overall: Decent job MCing up front. I could’ve done more crowd work and tried to play off the crowd a little more. The “kinda cool kinda nerd” joke at the end did really well.

Late night comedy

httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=L8rd0w_VXfM

2m15s I’m always confused when “I remember being on the plane misses” but the baggage check hits

3m04s Rephrase “would’ve wanted” to “wants”

Overall: Mediocre and I stumbled over the wording on my last joke.

The Sunday writer’s mic

httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=D7zNE8_yG2Y

1m42s Make the fast forwarding motion clearer

3m48s Make the premise clearer

4m03s Change “would” to “might”

4m33s “Retweet” should be the last word in the sentence

4m55s Change the order, rehab then crabs

Overall: Working out newer jokes, there’s potential but they need to be reworded a bit…

Going last on the 8pm show

httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=lcTm8ER18nA

1m51s I could’ve added something like, “they’re like, we’re recovering coke heads, jerk”

3m30s Throw my arm out more on “shave you”

4m00s Change to “When’d you see Shrek?”

6m36s That level of laugh on the big punch line doesn’t warrant doing a bit for 2.5 minutes

9m04s I’m surprised that iHaitian didn’t get a laugh

Part 2

httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=_lCfp6dXmCU

1m09s That’s a good one liner, I should use it more often

Overall: Solid but not amazing. The mobile adoption center bit needs work.

The 6pm show

httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=u8R4O6T1tjI

2m00s And they’re alive

2m20s Milk the modeling for longer

2m44s Rephrase “would’ve wanted” to “wants”

5m48s I stepped on a laugh to do a save line, no wonder it didn’t work

Overall: Mediocre set, I should’ve started talking to them earlier on since material was hitting so-so.