A bar show for 12-15 people
httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=WgQCulVbhd4
2m33s Cut the “unwise” line
5m22s Good job waiting for the laugh
7m24s Good job handling the heckle in character
10m15s Try saying, “just making sure”
Overall: Good set. That persona helped make a loud bar fairly quiet.
An open mic
httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=U0Xq2BZe3lA
1m02s Be more prepared for random laughs with this persona
3m05s Change “unsafe” to “uncomfortable”
6m54s Good delivery on this line.
Overall: Decent for a mic.
Going last on a music and comedy mic
httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=tzikk_-lZcQ
1m04s Don’t say the word “like”
3m23s This joke should be further apart from the Yale joke
4m26s Cut the unwise line
5m11s Rewrite or cut the woodchipper line
6m35s Reword to “you’d be surprised how often Jesus would…”
7m04s Reword to “the only place I kill at is…”
8m57s More emphasis on “that”
9m20s Good job handling heckling in character
11m30s Always nice to end on a strong laugh
Overall: Decent for a mic. Great job staying in character, especially with the crowdwork and heckles.
A bar show for 4-6 people
httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=DQeE5qg96M8
0m20s Put the mic hand down and stare at the crowd for a few seconds first
1m18s Don’t say “like”
4m27s The previous two sentences can be combined into one
6m19s Turn to someone else for this line
Overall: There were a couple of strong laughs in an otherwise weak set.
An open mic
httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=g7SFoXYgkdw
4m18s Cut the wood chipper line
Overall: Standard open mic response, but I stayed in character the whole time.
