Hosting the second half of a mic
httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=rivtJ718KII
1m07s Make a more sudden retching motion
4m06s Try rephrasing to “just thought I’d tell you up front, so you’re less heartbroken later”
Overall: Decent for a mic.
Performance Critique: June 4b
The 8pm show
httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=0cC80jj25jQ
1m24s Stay moving and drunker throughout the act out
5m58s Heavier sarcasm in my tone
7m53s Do a better lipstick smear motion
Overall: Solid set.
Performance Critique: June 4a
An open mic (with a poorly placed camera)
httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=u8U2-cg4eqo
2m40s Maybe try “mine stopped after me. I’m the first and last kid, only child.”
4m57s Say “but he has a life sentence” instead
5m23s Cut the riddle joke
Overall: Good for a mic.
Performance Critique: June 3b
Doing checks on the 10pm show
httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=G8NnX4a3-Jc
2m26s Make the premise clearer
3m04s Hit the mic harder
4m33s Cut the word “probably”
Overall: I got laughs from the people that were listening.
Performance Critique: June 10c
The 8pm show
httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=H5Ex3LahCOs
0m50s Fix the radar sound
1m53s Good improvised line about optimism
3m50s I should’ve gone into save lines two minutes earlier in this set
4m26s Move my eyes instead of my head
6m44s Change the chicken line
Overall: I bombed . I didn’t connect with the audience. There were a few ok laughs but way too many silent spots especially in the first half of the set.
