Category: Comedy

The 10pm show

httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=O98nzhrTCkI

0m25s Fingers on my left hand should be wiggling more

2m25s The super soft whisper gets a bigger laugh

4m38s My face should be looking up higher

5m10s Seem happier

5m48s The thesaurus joke needs to be cut or reworded

7m28s The actually love line isn’t needed to go into this, do it after the twice the neglect joke instead

8m48s This joke is still noticeably weaker than the first five minutes

Overall: Ok but not great. I did too many newer jokes in a row in the middle and ruined momentum.

The 8pm show for a smaller than usual audience

httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=VVOPdBv81aE

4m05s I got way too distracted without making it funny

4m51s Smile a little more on the immigrant line

7m28s DVD line works better when I’m sad

Overall: Weak set, especially the second half. I should’ve used a few a more save lines or gone into crowd work earlier.

Late night music and comedy

httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=oRUIdUtETgI

1m27s Change the delivery on the friends line

3m54s Stay pointing at/addressing one specific person for the propose line

8m40s Tighten the wording, or at least make it flow better

9m19s Don’t use bottle twice in the sentence, say liter the first time

10m24s Make the motion more obvious that I’m referring to my face

11m08s Try “they’re all smiling and happy, cause they just got my new DVD”

Overall: Great set of mostly new material, especially considering it was 2am.

MCing a show for 10-12 people

httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=FhU9LllstwY

0m20s Instead of “tell you” say “share”

2m28s Decent crowd work

Overall: This is the shortest up front MC set ever, I got a few ok laughs and ended on a laugh. I did more time later but didn’t get to film it.

At a writer’s mic

httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=MrmDfnOGkTo

0m51s Cut the fractions line

4m54s The sad delivery is better than the aggressive delivery of the DVD line

6m20s Add a “that’s ridiculous right? that’s like saying…” to make it more emotional and conversational

8m06s Find a better way to get to that ending

Overall: About as good as an open mic can go. Although the biggest laughs were from interacting with disruptive crowd members.