Doing a check spot 2 hours into a show
httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=NknkD1guG-c
1m25s Sound a little more playful when saying “cause I hate your hair”
3m10s Sound a little angrier
5m10s Cut the uncle line or put it after the “everyone’s been” line
5m33s I gotta learn how to handle actual responses here better
Overall: Average for a check spot, some laughs, but not great
An open mic
httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=HYmGKZc5Htg
0m35s Try to keep my hands above my elbows for the whole set instead of dropping them to my sides at almost every punch line
2m33s No need for that many F-bombs in that short of a time, pick one place
4m05s Reword to “I hate the suburbs because”
5m03s At least it’s a good save line
5m11s Don’t pause there
5m45s More emphasis on the word “every”
Overall: Weak response even for a mic, working on newer stuff
The Sunday writer’s mic
httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=lgCvRv_q-ts
0m39s Sound happier about this
0m54s Make mouth talk motions with my hands
1m35s Cut “in front of everything else”
2m02s Cut “On your way out”
3m38s Think about a different delivery for this joke, maybe happier
4m11s Don’t pause here, pause after “watching them take their birth control”
Overall: Weak response even for a mic, working on mostly newer stuff
Doing a check spot on the 10pm show
httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=N6UFHrPO67c
1m10s I got the shoes and hair lines backwards
3m19s Point at “neuro divorce” not earlier in the line
Overall: Good for a check spot
Doing a longer set on the 8pm show
httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=Xuj1lZ5FktM
1m35s Nice improvised bit
3m15s Address the groan and applause by different parts of the audience right after it happened, not twenty seconds later
4m58s No need for “too” at the end of the sentence
6m53s The psycho smile should show teeth at all times
11m10s Do a little crowd work or normal bit instead of going into a character when there’s a weird slow down
11m50s Nice to know the save line works
12m46s Hold the hand motion for a little longer
13m02s Change the delivery on “bring it”
14m34s Decent response
Overall: Good set, the first eleven minutes were stronger than the last six.
