An open mic
httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=WONeL49NQTQ
1m09s Hit “fucking immigrants” harder, maybe even angry
2m35s Put more emphasis on “AND”
4m29s Maybe add “off tune” before “singing”
Overall: Great for an open mic
Performance Critique: August 10b
MCing a bar show
httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=ajyBEHMlSnI
1m48s I could also go with “Ill, Michigan? How far away from Detroit is that?”
2m32s If I had remembered I said Jersey, and called back to it, it would’ve hit well
6m10s Add “he’s probably texting his coke dealer”
7m32s Nice line
7m53s Even better would be to say “between the four of you, you have one job and are from Minnesota”
9m15s Doing time between comics
12m13s Tighten to “he goes thru your stuff but doesn’t take anything because…”
13m19s Make the friend’s voice more different from my own
13m49s Decent improvised line
Overall: Good job with the upfront time mixing in the crowd work with material. The in between comics stuff could’ve gone better though.
Performance Critique: August 10a
An open mic
httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=M5JvbIJTiv0
0m50s Cut this line or reword it
3m35s Cut or reword this line
Overall: Decent response for this specific (usually extra tough) mic
Performance Critique: August 9b
A 9:30 show
httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=C8Y2n7ATROQ
0m47s No need for that line
4m11s Drop my head quicker after that line
4m52s At least the new line hit decently well
6m28s From the tape, it doesn’t seem like anyone actually hates me at this set yet, no need to keep putting that thought in their head
8m20s Might be a decent line, “it’s okay to hate me AND laugh”
Overall: Mediocre and scatter brained. I think I told the audience they hated me on five or six different occasions, no need to mention that even if it’s true. On the bright side, two new punch lines seems to be working in a newer joke.
Performance Critique: August 9a
A music and comedy mic
httpv://www.youtube.com/watch?v=Y3zJ_txmsN8
1m55s Lean forward while doing the pointing motion for more emphasis
3m59s Should’ve gone for a save line here. I paused thinking about it, but then just went to the next bit.
4m55s Pause for half a beat after “always greener”
6m07s Sound more confused and surprised that someone would object to the floor
6m44s Instead of “someone might buy” say “this guys gonna buy”
9m01s Say “expensive” instead of “difficult”
Overall: Pretty terrible set, even for a mic.
